The second problem…
I had a bad habit of summarizing.
Instead of using well crafted narratives, descriptions, and engaging dialogues…and letting the story tell itself…I was taking shortcuts.
There were pages upon pages that read like, “Over the past few months, my relationship with Sarah had become strained. The demand at Global Access was partially responsible, but so was the unrelenting hunt for Ellie’s killer.”
Really?
So things are strained with Sarah?
I didn’t feel it.
Not if I couldn’t hear the dialogue for myself. Feel the tension. Or see Sarah’s expressions through my mind’s eyes.
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