There were a lot of different things I identified to correct with my writing. But there were two that stuck out the most prominently.
The first was my sentence structure. Somewhere early on, I’d gotten the impression that good writing involved long flowing sentences. And obscure words. But after studying the author’s I liked to read, I realized that wasn’t true. Not most of the time, anyway. While there was still room for regal-esque sentences, too much use of them came across poorly. And it made the story harder to read. It didn’t flow. It made the reader pause and try to decipher it.
For instance, you could put something down that said, "“The wintry blend of snow and ice culminated in a gripping chill that threatened the very beating of my heart.”
When in reality, you might be better served by just saying, "It was fucking cold outside."
Not exactly like that…but something similar. My sentences, as they stood in Denver Nights, were overly complex.
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